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put me under, cover my face, stuff my lungs with your chemical lies.

if they were to take me apart,
slice open my chest,
peel back the skin keeping me whole,
they would find:

a. one heart, slowly ticking.
(they would not find anything,
but they would have to say they did.
after all, girls can't live without a heart.
they forget that i'm not the first:
a score of girls walking even though
they should have faded long ago.)

b. each rib curved so perfectly,
a shield around my lungs.
(a cage, keeping my breath from bursting
out of my skin. know that this is just me,
held together by nature,
unable to lose control of myself.)

c. two sacs of cells, nestled beside each other.
(no first-hand smoke here, no sir.
only second-hand dust, only
things i could not get rid of,
only bits of places i've been,
caught in my body.
postcards of memories i can't see.)

d. a skeleton, still and alive.
(sleeping, with blood cells being produced
in the hollows of my curves.
the rattling of my bones cannot be heard,
but if it could, my skeleton would tell you
all my secrets. it would beg you,
please don't leave me.
i never fought the monsters under my bed,
i just turned them into the skeletons in my closet,
the skeletons i wear inside of my body.)
just for the record, i know biopsies aren't done on the whole body.



i've been neglecting you guys terribly.
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wallabiesarechipper1 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very clever and meaningful this is.
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Jadite Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
thank you. (:
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MarianWeaver Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Professional Writer
This is marvellous! It never descends into sentimentality, but there's such a depth of feeling here. I love the structure, as though this is an autopsy report rather than a poem.

i never fought the monsters under my bed,
i just turned them into the skeletons in my closet,


This couplet in particular is so striking - the metaphors should clash, but instead they make a terrible kind of sense. Very sophisticated.


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Jadite Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
i am very glad you enjoyed this. (: thank you so much for your kind words.
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional
A poignant, beautiful and wonderfully structured piece.
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Jadite Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
thank you so much. (:
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arabesque-o Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Photographer
i'va fallen for the last 3 lines of this<3
(does it seem creepy that i could help but whisper this out loud, because something this good shouldn't just populate my dusty monitor?)
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
thank youuu. <3
(nope. not at all. xD)
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Wow I absolutely love:

"only second-hand dust, only
things i could not get rid of,"

and

"i just turned them into the skeletons in my closet,
the skeletons i wear inside of my body.)"


A very thoughtful and creative piece.
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
aw, thank you. i appreciate your kind comment. <3
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
My pleasure.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012
:faint: thank you so much. <3 i'm honored.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
You're welcome.
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DestinyChick Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
my favorite stanza is about the cage...and I second what Liz said...morbid turned elegant : D
and the concept of the skeletons being inside the body instead of in the closet is neat and innovative ^^
good job!
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012
aw, thank you. <3
i guess i was hoping you'd hear the way my skeleton rattled my fear that you'd leave me too.
^ line from an old poem. yeeeah. -snuggles against-
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
Great anatomical poem! Loved the way you described each part.
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012
thank you. (:
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OhSententia Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
you have a lovely way of making something so morbid sound very elegant.
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
why thank you. c: it was supposed to be even more morbid. i'm not quite sure it worked.
but that's what rewrites are for, i suppose.
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OhSententia Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
it is, i think. xD
i still find it very surreal and like... pretty though. maybe im just weird. |D
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Jadite Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
oh goodie. c:
nah, i tried for surreal and kind of for pretty.
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OhSententia Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
good, good. C': im glad it came off how you intended then.
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